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Line of duty

Postby Brikguy0410 » Wed Mar 19, 2014 2:10 pm

Once I improve my drawing, I'm going to try and do a comic, called line of duty, it's about a squad of valorosian soldiers trapped in the territory taken during the seven hour war, trapped behind enemy lines and with no contact to the empire, they blast there way through NATO soldiers and trattorians in an attempt to free the suppressed systems, and go on to lead a resistance movement, causing suppressed valorosains on thousands of worlds to take up arms in a bid to return to the empire of valoros.

So how does this sound folks? Also any tips for drawing minifigs or drawing in general?

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Re: Line of duty

Postby Maverick » Wed Mar 19, 2014 3:01 pm

I thought you went down to only sevenhundred worlds. Also, you don't have to draw minifigs. Every artist has his/her own style.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Battlegrinder » Wed Mar 19, 2014 3:16 pm

As a story concept, its cliche, but that's not exactly a crippling flaw. If you can make the story interesting enough, you can make your audience look past the cliches and just enjoy it.

How rough are your current art skills, out of curiosity? If they're poor enough that you think it will take a long time to get them up to a reasonable level, I'd suggest you either shelve or backburner the comic idea, and try and tell the story another way (You can probably pull off an Irregular Webcomic style project with pretty meager resources, for example). Or you could try to go on deviantart or a similar site and see if you can find an artist willing to help you out. Or you could try just writting the story, like what ShadowScythe's been doing with the Scythian Shorts.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Quantumsurfer » Wed Mar 19, 2014 5:03 pm

Sounds really good.

I had a similar thought today while running errands. Something triggered a memory of The Warriors and I was tickled by the idea of your guys placed in that role, trying to make it past all the gangs of the BrikVerse.

Metaphor for the whole Brikguy versus the Forums thing that has been happening lately, really.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Brikguy0410 » Wed Mar 19, 2014 5:22 pm

Battlegrinder wrote:As a story concept, its cliche, but that's not exactly a crippling flaw. If you can make the story interesting enough, you can make your audience look past the cliches and just enjoy it.

How rough are your current art skills, out of curiosity? If they're poor enough that you think it will take a long time to get them up to a reasonable level, I'd suggest you either shelve or backburner the comic idea, and try and tell the story another way (You can probably pull off an Irregular Webcomic style project with pretty meager resources, for example). Or you could try to go on deviantart or a similar site and see if you can find an artist willing to help you out. Or you could try just writting the story, like what ShadowScythe's been doing with the Scythian Shorts.

I actually had the idea to use actual lego and take pics, then put it in comic form, like Kaplan did with encounter on bios, also :wtc: does cliche mean
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Brikguy0410 » Wed Mar 19, 2014 5:40 pm

These are the characters


Kyle: the squad leader, although young, he has proven himself A worthy leader

Sectos: the squad sniper, he rarely talks and communicates through hand signals only Kyle can seem to understand

Tyrone: the heavy weapons trooper, and dispute his large muscular appearance, he's a caring guy

Rick: Kyle's brother, and the squad melee troopers, his specialties included arguing with Kyle and defying orders, or as he calls it "finding an alternate route" also very hot-headed

The smithson twins: two fresh recruits that tend to do whatever Rick tells them to, so when he "finds an alternate route" they usually follow


Samantha: the demolitions expert and the only girl in the squad
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Battlegrinder » Wed Mar 19, 2014 6:26 pm

Brikguy0410 wrote: also :wtc: does cliche mean


I almost forgot you were 12 for a minute there.

Regarding the characters, I think you should really swap some traits around and try to come up with some more original elements, as your current ones are a little predictable. They also still have a very short bio. You want to have around a paragraph or two for each one. Characters have a history, multifaceted personalities, unique quirks, personal growth, and their own identity. Spear Carriers have a name, job description, and a single trait so you can tell them apart.

Spend some time on this site, after a little while you should have a better grasp of what kind of story you want to write and how to start building it. I am so sorry. Here's a good place to start.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Colette » Wed Mar 19, 2014 6:31 pm

A few thoughts on this idea:

You might be better off trying a brikfic. Internet comics are near guaranteed to stop prematurely, at least in my experience, and I guarantee that your comic skills right now are shit, and would only get worse attempting minifigs. I'm not trying to specifically single you out or anything, but as I've learned from personal experience, drawing is really hard. Rayhawk makes drawing minifigs effortless, but keep in mind that for a while his sustenance depended on it.

Lego webcomic could be more feasible, but lego piece shortages become really apparent when trying these. Not to mention, you would need to obtain a decent camera as well.

EDIT: Whoops, Battlegrinder ninja'd me.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Brikguy0410 » Wed Mar 19, 2014 6:38 pm

Colette wrote:A few thoughts on this idea:

You might be better off trying a brikfic. Internet comics are near guaranteed to stop prematurely, at least in my experience, and I guarantee that your comic skills right now are shit, and would only get worse attempting minifigs. I'm not trying to specifically single you out or anything, but as I've learned from personal experience, drawing is really hard. Rayhawk makes drawing minifigs effortless, but keep in mind that for a while his sustenance depended on it.

Lego webcomic could be more feasible, but lego piece shortages become really apparent when trying these. Not to mention, you would need to obtain a decent camera as well.

EDIT: Whoops, Battlegrinder ninja'd me.

Wait, so is a brikfic like the Scythian shorts, no, pictures?
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Battlegrinder » Wed Mar 19, 2014 7:49 pm

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Re: Line of duty

Postby Quantumsurfer » Thu Mar 20, 2014 12:27 pm

Go for broke and do both. You only get better by doing.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Tzan » Thu Mar 20, 2014 12:34 pm

Quantumsurfer wrote:Go for broke and do both. You only get better by doing.


Its like smoking while drinking soda.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby The Shadowscythe » Thu Mar 20, 2014 1:41 pm

Tzan wrote:
Quantumsurfer wrote:Go for broke and do both. You only get better by doing.


Its like smoking while drinking soda.


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Re: Line of duty

Postby Tzan » Thu Mar 20, 2014 1:54 pm

I only do one of those.
I was suggesting that Brickguy do both.
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Re: Line of duty

Postby Brikguy0410 » Thu Mar 20, 2014 2:29 pm

Tzan wrote:I only do one of those.
I was suggesting that Brickguy do both.

So, you want me to kill myself, way to rip off sam
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